rider68

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Dreaded Market Days:

Posted Oct 19, 2008 · 46 lines · 7 critiques

Dreaded Market Days:

I’m lost confused
And somewhat bemused,
Consumed;
by this madding crowd,
As touts stand - yelling/shouting
enticing the gullible,
the punters - encouraging
the masses pushing and shoving,
their heads swaying, - arms flaying

Bodies;
Seas of flesh wobbling –
Rippling like waves
as massive hips gyrate and swing

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in and out, in and out,
lumbering from side to side,
shimmering back and forth
All in perfect time

Panic strikes;
my wits alight
I’m forced to flee
this advancing herd
Like locusts
In-which encroach upon me?

Slipping sliding stumbling around,
I fall to the ground
Grovelling on all fore’s
Dogs queue
to hump the rear
out of me,

kids screaming running amok -
acting out like clowns,
mothers grunting,
groaning moaning,
as fathers pout
with yesterdays frowns,

A guy leans down

“A Burger sir, Or 2 for a pound”
“No thanks”… I scream

As I run from the stench,
And oh……….the smell
Of yesterdays –
second hand fry’s
while the dogs still chasing
In pursuit of me…

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"I am so sorry for your loss. I had a Pam - his name was John. It is so hard to lose such care, but we must always remember how much we were blessed to have ever had it to begin with. I wish you peace. ((hug)) ~Pamela"
July 2009
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Received a critique
on Dreaded Market Days: from @Candlewitch
"At first, when reading this piece, I felt panicked and smothered, because I hate crowds of people. Then when I got to the part about the dog, I had to start over... it gave me a huge smile. Always, Cat p.s. I hope that…"
March 2009
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Received a critique
on Dreaded Market Days: from @prayersbyPatty
"Sorry it took me so long to read this, I am literally laughing about the dog bit. Hilarious! I feel this way sometimes when I go out or in a crowd, but I think my age is making noisy places not a place where I want to b…"
October 2008
23 Thu

Received a critique
on Dreaded Market Days: from @Rett
"I love humorous poems. *G* Respectfully, Rett: "Does this election remind you of The Emperors New Clothes? No one has the guts to tell him because..." Rett"
23 Thu

Received a critique
on Dreaded Market Days: from @Janice Pearce
"Peter. This was hilarious! I think Chuck is onto something here! "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers"
20 Mon

Received a critique
on Dreaded Market Days: from @infinite_dwarf
"Touts are kind of like our solicitors and salesmen. Only definitions I know of for a punter are compulsive gamblers, or those who go to whorehouses.... Peter - sounds like our malls here during the holiday season. Gotta…"
20 Mon

Received a critique
on Dreaded Market Days: from @barbsdad2003
"as much as reasonably possible. Although a crowd of starlings don't bother me. Or a score of hawks circling overhead over me'n Buster; that's OK, too, as long's they stay up there. I like your tongue in your cheek. Good…"
19 Sun

Received a critique
on Dreaded Market Days: from @Rett
"And I enjoyed the rest of it too. There is a bit of a language gap though from this side of the pond. Touts and punters (touts are what we call hucksters I think. ones that try to get you to buy or come in.) Punters I a…"
19 Sun

Critiqued
"Bruce The Goose" by @Janice Pearce
"To you both: I love this type humour....great for putting a smile on peoples faces, even better that you have managed to overcome the physical restrictions of working jointly - over distance..... Very Best regards.....t…"
19 Sun

Critiqued
"for the wise" by @Eduardo Cruz
"But very well writen.....enough given,... so to think, and a wise conclusion, Great thoughts Eddie... Be well take care..... Peter ~~~"I am not afraid of tomorrow, for I have seen yesterday, and I love today."~~~"
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Dreaded Market Days:
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"pardon me, but ..." by @barbsdad2003
"Smiling.....love the humour, Best regards. To you Chuck... Peter ~~~"I am not afraid of tomorrow, for I have seen yesterday, and I love today."~~~"
18 Sat

Critiqued
"A Moment Etched in Time" by @prayersbyPatty
"Hi Patty, This is a Beautiful moment caught and written down, Best regards. peter ~~~"I am not afraid of tomorrow, for I have seen yesterday, and I love today."~~~"
18 Sat

Critiqued
"Life is Theatre (Tanka)" by @leonard daranjo
"Yet again....few words, and yet it entice's the the reader to think, your words are chosen well.....and complete. very best regards... Peter ~~~"I am not afraid of tomorrow, for I have seen yesterday, and I love today."…"
18 Sat

Critiqued
"syntax" by @Rett
"Glad to see you around, Rett what stired you to writing this,..You haven't been looking at my wage packet by any chance?...... I would laugh...except i feel like crying the amount of tax i've paid. Glad to hear of you…"
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"Basking In The Calm" by @infinite_dwarf
"This is a lovely moment, I love writing seen through the eyes of the writer moments penned, for everlasting, reminds me of a song....."Pack up your troubles in an old kit bag" But your Packing for a new start and a new…"
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on Dreaded Market Days: from @prayersbyPatty

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on Dreaded Market Days: from @Janice Pearce

on Dreaded Market Days: from @infinite_dwarf

on Dreaded Market Days: from @barbsdad2003

on Dreaded Market Days: from @Rett

"Bruce The Goose" by @Janice Pearce

"for the wise" by @Eduardo Cruz

"pardon me, but ..." by @barbsdad2003

"A Moment Etched in Time" by @prayersbyPatty

"Life is Theatre (Tanka)" by @leonard daranjo

"syntax" by @Rett

"Basking In The Calm" by @infinite_dwarf

"Facts Of Life (written as Hay(na)kys)" by @infinite_dwarf

April 2008 — 14 poems

on "For A Dear Friend" by @Jadeath212

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