Damo

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The Heir - The Air

Posted Jun 30, 2010 · 28 lines · 9 critiques

E(x)ternal imagined, its energy in-min[(e)(d)]. Equable in-vision:
Impervious eyes. Well faired. in warm winter – Air Is – in-hailed
Then air is. Ex-hailed. Air is. In-took and then is: ex-spelled.
Ex-halting the air – The Heir – Is the(a)ir:

    Revoltened. Resinous. Residue;
    Re-cyclic remains are rightly returned
    Re-changing the flame – re-chaining;
    Re-claiming the same: a gain
    Again and a gain and again;
    Re-naming the smoulders of rain.

The game is plain:- Inside.
In side it is plain – plain’ with his zein; again. And outside
It’s plain – in Time. Out side it’s plain’ in va(e)in.

In place and on going, it’s gone from the main…

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Gone from the main – it trains,
Its lefting the brain:
De-maim.
De-maim, de-suffer – de-suffer the slain.
In-sain’
It’s writing whats left in the brain:

    Surrender - a stroke – an inking is spoke
    And summonsed a slithery snake
    A snake scent to spin
    Sneak, swirl and seduce:
    A snake scent to strike at the fire.

Soothing; its scolding -
A soul is evolving -
Bandaged by burning: desire.

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First poem published 1 days later.
July 2010
07 Wed

Received a critique
on The Heir - The Air from @Shula
"I have discovered your poetry tonight,have only read this one so far,it is cleverly written and the alliteration you have used Impresses the meaning you portray. I shall return and read more another time. sheila"
06 Tue

Received a critique
on The Heir - The Air from @judyanne
"fantasically interesting (w)rite so adore the last three lines take a bow damo love judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html"
06 Tue

Critiqued
"Redemption " by @Seren
"I often go up to Smith's Lake with friends of mine - they have a little holiday house up there.... love it!"
06 Tue

Critiqued
"Out of the dim, a light" by @raskin
"ohh - thanks for givinbg it thgat extra b it of dimension... not being an American, the reference is not immediately recognisable - but now t hat you say it! :-) Hope you had a good Independance Day"
June 2010
30 Wed

Received a critique
on Go - And Get Stuffed. from @R.M.Shanmugam
"a new style. to the point. nice. shan"
30 Wed

Received a critique
on The Heir - The Air from @mona
"it should be nominated too;everybody should read it."
30 Wed

Received a critique
on The Heir - The Air from @mona
"I forgot the stars ,but your poem need all the stars in the sky ,I bow with Seren and Anna."
30 Wed

Received a critique
on The Heir - The Air from @Seren
"Go aussie, I loved this one, painting the words ... I bow with ~A love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Ch…"
30 Wed

Received a critique
on The Heir - The Air from @mona
"What a crrrrazzy! An abstraction - a meditation… rhyme, aliteration, assonance, onomatopoeia…etc…textured…tonal! good job(wink) MONA"
30 Wed

Critiqued
"an ancient light, gathering" by @Kailashana
"The moon/water/tidal theme is strong and beautiful...Passionate poetry - moonlit sexy...Your words are all ways so concentrated...All ways worth re-reading to really let it wash over!"
30 Wed

Critiqued
"Wolves and Lambs" by @slybard
"The intro helped me when I read it. I read it out loud in my head and could 'hear' the momentum build... Would be great to hear how you would speak these words..."
30 Wed

Critiqued
"humanSexuality a modern version " by @loved
"A 'modern' take... boxed up neatly... if only it were this easy...on second thought thank 'Time' it's not!"
30 Wed

Critiqued
"Swinging" by @kitkat
"Nice narrative - it sounds like the start of something more..."
30 Wed

Critiqued
"Love only a pass time" by @R.M.Shanmugam
"Each choice made - countless choices remain unmade...a bird in the hand and all..."
30 Wed

Critiqued
"Out of the dim, a light" by @raskin
"Short, sweet, fleeting...like a shadow lost to the shade...every moment a reminder..."
30 Wed

Received a critique
on The Heir - The Air from @Kailashana
"I can only smile and bow in front of a poetic painting. ~A The whole modern world has divided itself into Conservatives and Progressives. The business of Progressives is to go on making mistakes. The business of the Con…"
30 Wed

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23 Wed

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on The Heir - The Air from @Shula

on The Heir - The Air from @judyanne

"Redemption " by @Seren

"Out of the dim, a light" by @raskin

on Go - And Get Stuffed. from @R.M.Shanmugam

on The Heir - The Air from @mona

on The Heir - The Air from @mona

on The Heir - The Air from @Seren

on The Heir - The Air from @mona

"an ancient light, gathering" by @Kailashana

"Wolves and Lambs" by @slybard

"humanSexuality a modern version " by @loved

"Swinging" by @kitkat

"Love only a pass time" by @R.M.Shanmugam

"Out of the dim, a light" by @raskin

on The Heir - The Air from @Kailashana

June 2010 — 5 poems

on "Once A Loser" (since unpublished) by @ngaioBeck

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