Gentle Storm

Member since January 22, 2008

Member for 18 years, 4 months

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I Am Woman

Posted Feb 17, 2012 · 13 lines · 6 critiques

I am a woman

It's not my fault
I was born a paradox
sweet and soft and malleable
but armed,
with a brain as quick as a rabbit,
a tongue as sharp as a dagger
and a spirit that will not yield

Kill me, beat me, rape me,
you'll never, ever break me
I was born a woman,
a goddess in the womb

not a stallion born to be broken.

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January 2023
21 Sat

Anniversary
15 years of membership
January 2018
21 Sun

Anniversary
10 years of membership
January 2013
21 Mon

Anniversary
5 years of membership
February 2012
20 Mon

Received a critique
on I Am Woman from @weirdelf
"Despite our differences , perhaps we can work together"
20 Mon

Received a critique
on I Am Woman from @Ian.T
"An excellent write the above have said it all, just think that a "Rapier" would be much better than a Rabbit, as it is such a sharp clean weapon to be used with caution, lol , Yours Ian.T"
20 Mon

Received a critique
on I Am Woman from @loved
"Rabbits only sexualize, they homoise and are downright stupid, in intelligence naught and forever in sexual acts get caught. The sex in rabbits surpasses all and intelligence, you as a woman too have after all. Look aro…"
18 Sat

Received a critique
on I Am Woman from @Nordic cloud
"The title and the first two lines had me laughing and excited, and I was not disappointed by the rest either. If we think of the rabbit in Alice through the Looking Glass then....? Yours Ann of N."
18 Sat

Received a critique
on I Am Woman from @WonderGolly
"nice piece of write flowing firm from start to finish. You'll make an influential Women Right Activate. lolz. I like this lines: Kill me, beat me, rape me, you'll never, ever break me I was born a woman, a goddess in th…"
18 Sat

Received a critique
on I Am Woman from @weirdelf
"I adore empowerment in women. One line bothers me with a brain as quick as a rabbit, rabbits are stupid, Very well written, you wordcraft well but that rabbit?They are more known for breeding, which does not equate with…"
17 Fri

Posted a poem
I Am Woman
"I am a woman"
Open thread 13 lines
January 2012
11 Wed

Received a critique
on Agitated Restlessness from @wesley snow
"I agree with virtually everything Michelle said. "Restlessness" is far too cumbersome. I'm not sure the poem peters out anywhere, but you need to determine that. I have two small suggestions not mentioned by Michelle. T…"
09 Mon

Received a critique
on Agitated Restlessness from @MichelleK
"however, there are too many adjectives and adverbs. Some need to be there (i.e. 'slowly') but I think this poem would benefit from cutting them out completely and actually showing us through imagery. The tricky thing wi…"
09 Mon

Posted a poem
Agitated Restlessness
"An agitated restlessness fills me,"
Open thread 38 lines
December 2011
11 Sun

Posted a poem
Oh my love
"This cliche teenage heart drums in rhythm with the pounding and rushing and whirring of the world surrounding me. Trapped within a cage of skin and bone, throbbing to be free, begging to be let go."
Open thread 17 lines
08 Thu

Posted a poem
Shallow Depths of Me
"There is this rage that dwells inside of me,"
Open thread 46 lines
August 2011
28 Sun

Posted a poem
Experimental Poem
"There is a rage that dwells within me, white hot and flowing vibrant, living crimson through my burning veins."
Open thread 15 lines
January 2009
21 Wed

Anniversary
One year of membership
August 2008
03 Sun

Posted a poem
Untitled
"I sweep black lips"
Open thread 80 lines
03 Sun

Critiqued
"Lonely" by @Andie Jean
"Personally, I think that this was really good. I agree with Jess a little bit about the ending. But in a way I also get what you meant at the end."
July 2008
20 Sun

Posted a poem
Hello...Goodbye
"All my life"
Open thread 58 lines
10 Thu

Posted a poem
Wings
"Wings and wisps,"
Open thread 63 lines
June 2008
15 Sun

Posted a poem
Dusted in Fairytales
"Sparkling, glistening,"
Open thread 39 lines
May 2008
01 Thu

Posted a poem
A Million Roses
" "
Open thread 76 lines
April 2008
18 Fri

Posted a poem
Suicide
"every bone in you"
Open thread 34 lines
03 Thu

Posted a poem
Blood On My Hands
"This blood on my hands,"
Open thread 36 lines
January 2008
24 Thu

Critiqued
"Firelight" by @jillianuncensored
"I think that the rhythm was very, very good. I love how you describe things...the poem really reeled me in. Love it. -Gentle Storm-"
24 Thu

Critiqued
"From Ashes...To Hope" by @Musical Lessons
"I'm basically speechless, I don't know how much my opinion on this is worth...but I think that this is a really great poem and that it had a really great flow. This poem kind of reminded me of me and my best friend...we…"
24 Thu

First critique offered
on "From Ashes...To Hope" by @Musical Lessons
23 Wed

First publication
My Last Prayer
21 Mon

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 2 days later.
15 Tue

Highest posting month
January 2008 — 6 poems

About Me

About me

My name is Melanie.
I'm currently 16 years old and junior in high school.
I've been a member of neopoet.com for about three years now.
I hope that my poetry is evolving, but of course, I can't really say for sure.

I'm a friendly, talkative, intelligent, and argumentative kid. The angst of my middle-school years has greatly subsided, but what sort of existentialist would I be if I didn't retain at least a bit of it?

15 years of membership

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5 years of membership

on I Am Woman from @weirdelf

on I Am Woman from @Ian.T

on I Am Woman from @loved

on I Am Woman from @Nordic cloud

on I Am Woman from @WonderGolly

on I Am Woman from @weirdelf

on Agitated Restlessness from @wesley snow

on Agitated Restlessness from @MichelleK

One year of membership

"Lonely" by @Andie Jean

"Firelight" by @jillianuncensored

"From Ashes...To Hope" by @Musical Lessons

on "From Ashes...To Hope" by @Musical Lessons

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January 2008 — 6 poems

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