Carchuleto

Member since December 30, 2009

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Overcast

Posted Apr 18, 2010 · 25 lines · 10 critiques

The waves draw near
As I look down to the amber sand
Through the water I see a face
of whom I cannot place

The oncoming surge brings to me a voice
and all is washed away

The wind is almost here
As I look up to the overcast
In the clouds I see a shape
If only my words could just escape

The racing winds deliver a whisper
and all is left a blur

The sun bursts through the overcast
As the winds retreat

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the waves become discrete
From the water emerges a pair of feet

The sun blocks out his face
and at once I look back down to the ground

His plethora of greatness
And the ambiance of his beach
Leaves me breathless and stiff
With every single whiff

Unable to look up, I imagine a face
that if I walked by faith and not by sight
receive a quick glance I simply might

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April 2010
26 Mon

Received a critique
on Overcast from @magics02
"Yes happy to be back and to see my friends work here. I notice a big difference in your poetry and want to say Kudos to you guy, you are doing great and how about that band practice. You still keeping up with your music…"
25 Sun

Received a critique
on Overcast from @Seren
"I do believe that this is one of the best writes I have read from you well done I will be looking forward to more lol hint lol love JayCee Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education tha…"
25 Sun

Received a critique
on Overcast from @xena465
"This is the first time reading one of your poems, my lose...like Indi said "WoW" Brill ***** Rosina xena465"
25 Sun

Critiqued
"Lest We Forget ~ The Spirit of the Anzac " by @Seren
"Such a lovely tribute you give here, Jayne. I could feel a spiritual flow to it. If people like you keep writing such beautiful things about them, it will prove to be quite the challenge to forget. Enjoying many of your…"
25 Sun

Critiqued
"Spirit in the Water" by @xena465
"What a caring heart you must have had for that cat. Casting an opinion of critique I say that you effectively expressed your love for your Cuddles tenfold that of your typical everyday owner in this poem. On a personal…"
23 Fri

Critiqued
"CLIFF CRESCENDO" by @panaella
"You captured it just right! Such imagery in this write, for it carried me to distant places. I'll have to stop by for another view on your next work. -Carch"
23 Fri

Critiqued
"just around the corner" by @odd molly
"what a great write. Your syntax provided an easy going and insightful feeling. I felt elated upon looking over this as I saw the warm days and the beauty of nature, as I could also sense you pondering it. It is great to…"
22 Thu

Received a critique
on Overcast from @ifoundaplace
"I really enjoy reading your poetry Chris. It really calls to my attention. Good job. Hunter (:"
18 Sun

Received a critique
on Overcast from @magics02
"Thats a five starrer for me to you also, I really felt this as I read it and was also awe inspired by your growth in your poetry Carch. Amazing that is all I can say for now Amazing. Kudos to you Love Mona TIME well spe…"
18 Sun

Posted a poem
Overcast
"The waves draw near"
Open thread 25 lines
11 Sun

Critiqued
"Temptation of Christ" by @The Maddened Poet
"love it"
11 Sun

Critiqued
"Temptation of Christ" by @The Maddened Poet
"I love the language you use. It maintains the richness of the word while also taking a tone of its own. The rhyme is great and the story is illustrated well. Now off of my critique. Matthews chapter 4 vs 1-11 has very r…"
09 Fri

Received a critique
on In A Maze of Thorns from @magics02
"Mona Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short."
09 Fri

Received a critique
on Treacherous Temptation from @magics02
"Very good Carch where you been, missed you loads Love ya, Mona xoxoxoxo Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short."
09 Fri

Received a critique
on Treacherous Temptation from @odd molly
"I just found your profile and I want to say that I so much like what your are writing and the person you seem to be. I think your poem is very good it has a interesting theme and is well written. Iam not familiar with s…"
March 2010
06 Sat

Critiqued
"Forged Forgetting" by @weirdelf
"This was a very thought provoking poem. I usually dont like the repetition aspect throughout poetry but you made it work perfectly for your goal here. One of my friends keeps telling me that theres nothing to forgive as…"
February 2010
22 Mon

Critiqued
"40….. Love" by @seabhac
"Its been a while since we last made contact. I loved this poem and the way you personified the ball with human emotions. Being a tennis player myself, I could vividly see the action. Thanks for this amazing write! Respe…"
21 Sun

Most-discussed work
Treacherous Temptation

10 critiques to date.
21 Sun

Posted a poem
Treacherous Temptation
"When our sweet tooths’ tingle"
Open thread 31 lines
18 Thu

Posted a poem
Immured By Nature
"My friend, as I watch"
Open thread 46 lines
January 2010
09 Sat

Posted a poem
Heavenly Miracles
"Life has its miracles"
Open thread 24 lines
05 Tue

Posted a poem
In A Maze of Thorns
"In a maze of thorns"
Open thread 20 lines
04 Mon

Posted a poem
The Thick Fuzzy Brown Bear
"We were hiking along throughout the dark woods"
Open thread 19 lines
01 Fri

Posted a poem
Oh Father, A Revelation I Will Always Remember
"Oh Marvelous Spirit, how divine"
Open thread 45 lines
December 2009
31 Thu

First critique offered
on "THE LAST TRIP" by @magics02
31 Thu

Posted a poem
The Tenderness of a Teardrop
"His illusion for love"
Open thread 16 lines
30 Wed

First publication
Through His Grace Eternity Had Passed Him By
30 Wed

Posted a poem
Through His Grace Eternity Had Passed Him By
"They say his trials reveal his glory"
Open thread 80 lines
29 Tue

Joined Neopoet
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on Overcast from @magics02

on Overcast from @Seren

on Overcast from @xena465

"Lest We Forget ~ The Spirit of the Anzac " by @Seren

"Spirit in the Water" by @xena465

"CLIFF CRESCENDO" by @panaella

"just around the corner" by @odd molly

on Overcast from @ifoundaplace

on Overcast from @magics02

"Temptation of Christ" by @The Maddened Poet

"Temptation of Christ" by @The Maddened Poet

on In A Maze of Thorns from @magics02

on Treacherous Temptation from @magics02

on Treacherous Temptation from @odd molly

"Forged Forgetting" by @weirdelf

"40….. Love" by @seabhac

on "THE LAST TRIP" by @magics02

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