MEL

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Running Away

Posted Jun 10, 2009 · 13 lines · 2 critiques

Ive been sitting on my bed for the last 2 days

wondering how we are going to get through this

Even though you say it's ok...

I have this sinking feeling inside that it's not

Coz it's not ok that you left me

at 2 oclock in the morning

And it's not ok that I was crying

because you weren't strong enough to stay

and it's not ok for you to be selfish

when I need you more than words can say

You should have been there

you should have shown me that you care

instead of running away.

MEL’s timeline

June 2023
28 Wed

Anniversary
One year of membership
June 2022
28 Tue

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.
June 2009
11 Thu

Received a critique
on Running Away from @themoonman
"I can't remember the last time you posted, it seems like it has been a while... good to see you... your poem did deliver the sadness you were feeling and the anger at their leaving... but, I felt to engage the reader, i…"
10 Wed

Posted a poem
Running Away
"Ive been sitting on my bed for the last 2 days"
Open thread 13 lines
October 2008
22 Wed

Received a critique
on Harder Garter from @themoonman
"sorry to have missed this.... yowwch! yes, I get it... lol... hope to see more of your poems.... Richard"
September 2008
23 Tue

Posted a poem
Harder Garter
"Just a little something,"
Open thread 20 lines
16 Tue

Critiqued
"Broken Road" by @DarkinAZ
"Mel Inwood For me, this poem was very moving. I found sadness, a marriage breakdown, a child without a father, a sad lonely man who found more joy in drugs and alcohol than his wife and son! Hit home for me..perhaps I r…"
14 Sun

Received a critique
on Through Watery Eyes... from @orgami
"cars are hissing through their traipse and trees are sighing the wind is shifting through the house soon to be locked with winters dry air If I could only cry we have our backyard with water fountian (plug in kind) and…"
14 Sun

Received a critique
on Through Watery Eyes... from @themoonman
"haven't seen you around in a while... hope all is well.. loved your poem.. dreaming of the life I used to dream about.. great line... and I've been there too... your poem is delivered well and felt... Richard"
14 Sun

Critiqued
"This One Day (in memory of 9/11)" by @tbeaudet
"Mel Inwood Makes you realise that every day could be our last! This is what hurts me inside, because I know people who save things for that SPECIAL occasion, or that special day. You should always live for the moment, a…"
14 Sun

Posted a poem
Through Watery Eyes...
"It's days like these I want to crawl into a hole"
Open thread 35 lines
July 2008
01 Tue

Critiqued
"Agreement" by @weirdelf
"Mel Inwood I got so caught up in the comments that followed I forgot what the Poem was about... (scrolls back up to read it again...) To me, it is about being greatful for what we have in life, and not get swept up into…"
June 2008
26 Thu

Received a critique
on Damn Society.... from @weirdelf
"and how to stop them. Parents are becoming increasingly powerless in the face of Corporate advocated greed through advertising, not just in advertisements but the messages of mass culture. We can fight back. cheers, Jess"
25 Wed

Received a critique
on Tired of the Tears.... from @Secrets and Memories
"I could feel how you felt. Such a poem of feeling is one that touches others quite passionatly. To write something of life or your imagination is what brings a poem to life. And you my dear, know how to exactly do that.."
24 Tue

Critiqued
"Alone For Too Long" by @Secrets and Memories
"Mel Inwood I know exactly how that feels....something will change your life when you least expect it...all I can say is trust your gut feelings and intuition a bit more. Block out the big world and concentrate on the im…"
23 Mon

Received a critique
on Damn Society.... from @Rett
"I wholeheartedly agree. I have seen them stand in the middle of the road here and dare someone to run over them. Honk your horn and they will shoot you the finger and tell you go F yourself. Rett: It may look easy, when…"
23 Mon

Critiqued
"Betrayal (acrostic)" by @Frost Smith
"Mel Inwood Butterfly's in my stomach Lusting over him In his own world So fine... So devine! I have NO idea what acroustic is but how did I go?"
22 Sun

Posted a poem
Damn Society....
"Someone ripped away their innocence"
Open thread 19 lines
18 Wed

Received a critique
on Tired of the Tears.... from @Rett
"I find in those types of moods I just write everything down whichever way it comes, then later, at your leisure, you can read them and see what inspires you to write a poem, then work on the words from there. My mind co…"
16 Mon

Posted a poem
How HIGH Mum???
"What is it you want me to do Mum?"
Open thread 32 lines
16 Mon

Critiqued
"Lies to children 2" by @weirdelf
"Mel Inwood I have been completely honest with my oldest son about his dad from day one. I tried not to put him down, coz he is a good dad...just screwed up and in jail! But none of this has been a shock to my son, becau…"
14 Sat

Critiqued
" On Growing Deaf" by @Synchro
"Mel Inwood living in a world where I couldn't hear much, let alone nothing. The sound of my kids voices, even tho they drive me insane at times....Music..I could not live without music...the sound of the ocean, birds et…"
14 Sat

Posted a poem
Tired of the Tears....
"Another day, another tear falls"
Open thread 15 lines
09 Mon

Critiqued
"Kissing The Passing Time" by @Jacob
"Mel Inwood You have just described LOVE again so well in this poem. I get the feeling you have really been in love, perhaps still are. It's beautiful to see and read...It really warms the soul, because I believe that th…"
09 Mon

Posted a poem
Split Second Carnage
"  The sound of sirens in the distance"
Open thread 36 lines
03 Tue

Posted a poem
Injecting Society
"Why do they allow him to suffer that way?"
Open thread 33 lines
May 2008
29 Thu

Posted a poem
Tripping...
"Tumbling...."
Open thread 18 lines
26 Mon

Posted a poem
For Crying Out Loud
"  FOR CRYING OUT LOUD!!!!!"
Open thread 46 lines
25 Sun

Posted a poem
The Last Goodbye
"The Last Goodbye….."
Open thread 47 lines
23 Fri

Posted a poem
Life....
"A warm winter's day, I sit and dream away"
Open thread 20 lines
18 Sun

First critique offered
on "Absent lover" (since unpublished) by @professor
18 Sun

Most-discussed work
Hungarian Salami and Tim-Tam

18 critiques to date.
17 Sat

First publication
I'd Hold You
15 Thu

Highest posting month
May 2008 — 8 poems